Constructive criticsm on my story?

Im writing 3 novels currently. Mine sound good, but yours might be better. All you need to do is put a little more flow into the train of thought. Instead of skipping from scene to scene so fast, fill it in a little more. Also, instead of using vivid adjectives every sentence, use them a little more sparingly. It sounds kind of cheesy if you write the entire book like that. Descriptions are good for a beginning, but you'll tire of that writing style quickly. Hope to see your book in stores!